Tuesday, June 15, 2010

Exile Chapter 29 Rewrites

I've finished chapter 29 of the second draft of Exile and it can be downloaded at the bottom of this page

Most of this chapter remained true to the first draft, needing surprisingly little in the way of editing. A few changes were made to sentance and paragraph structure, and there were a few more changes in the end of the chapter to account for some major changes in the plot between the two drafts.

So, anyway, Mal has become what he has been taught to hate his entire life, and there is no way that Aaron knows for him to become human again. And as if he wasn't suffering already from that, as well as everything else that has happened to him, one of the few friends that he has left has decided that it is time to take her leave. An important thing to note in this chapter is the feeling's Mal is beginning to realize that he has for Silmera. Lilia is one of his best friends, and she will always be, but he has never loved her like everyone is expecting of him. His conflicting emotions between the woman he is coming to love, and the woman he is supposed to marry are just one more thing pressing down on top of him. He can't take much more punishment, but too bad, because I'm not through dragging him through the coals just yet.

The first draft of this story ended at 117,352 words.
The second draft is currently at 192,162 words, which is a difference of almost 75,000 words.

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