Monday, May 17, 2010

Exile Prologue Revision

I've added quite a large chunk to the prologue and the revised version can be downloaded on this page.

The added part deals with the character Shayla. If you have read the Ark of Zarathustra yuo'll know that the child born to Raven and Temari is named Shayla. This Shayla is the same person, though you'll have to wait until I get around to writing the Eternal Chain to find out how she got to her current situation.

The reason that I have added this part is that Shayla is a very important character in this story, though she has very little "screen time" in it. The entire story is about Mal proving himself worthy of becoming her successor, and cming to realize that it's his duty as the only one that can. Shayla is briefly mentioned once or twice and met briefly near the end, but in the first draft I never really played up the importance of her character, and what she's actually doing in this story. Plus, the Epilogue is about her, i figured that I should add something to the prologue to ballance that, as well as introduce her character right off, so there's no confusion as to who she is and why she's important. Though she does not appear very often, she is the one that basically manufactured the events that take place in the story in order to test the main character so taht he can prove himself worthy to her. I came to the decision to alter the prologue while revising my outline over the last week.

The first draft of this story ended at 117,352 words.
The second draft is currently at 146,091 words, just short of a 30,000 word difference.

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