I Am Nobody Chapter 17 Draft 2

I've finished up teh second draft of the next chapter of I Am Nobody, and you can find it at the bottom of this page.

Uhg.  This one was a hard one.  12 hours, it took.  12 freaking hours to revise 7 pages of text.  Fight scenes are a bit different from other scenes, they take a lot more care.  There are a lot of elements that have to come together perfectly, or else it becomes boring rather than exciting.  There's the action itself, there's the emotional aspect, what the characters are feeling, there's the pacing.  It has to be paced perfectly so that you include everything that needs to be included and still remains suspensful and exciting.  You've got to describe the way things move and react to each other clearly and realistically, or else it becomes confusing and breaks the laws of physics.  It takes a lot of balancing to get a fight scene just right, and this one seems like it took even more than usual.