The Eternal Chain Chapter 8 First Draft

I've finished the first draft of The Eternal Chain, chapter 8 and you can find it at the bottom of this page.

This chapter is a bit more of an introduction to Temari, and solidifying relationships between her and the other characters. There's also a bit of character development for Raven near the end. Something new I've added to TEmari's character to make her a bit more interesting, and give her some comic relif ability without her being so doofy this time around, is that she's a kleptomaniac. She'll steal just about everything she can get her hands on, if it's bolted down, she'll see it as a challenge and steal the bolts while she's at it.

In the original Beyond the Lost Horizon, this part had the characters looking for a piece of a spell deep under the Lost South. In this version, they're going down into the royal tomb to find a weapon left behind by Raven's ancestors. HOWEVER, the "weapon" actually was Temari, and she is leading them to something that is very useful to them, but not exactly a weapon. Also, a pretty epic fight is coming up, and the introduction of a couple of the cast of villains, Behindred, and a new villain called Stark that originally appeared at the very end of my extremely rough draft of what would have been the second book of the original trilogy.

One of the biggest problems with the original version of this story was that none of the villains were really in the story at all until the very end. That's why I really want to introduce as many of them as possible as soon as possible, and have them play a bigger, more noticable part in the story.