Exile Chapter 45 Rewrites

I've finished chapter 45 of the second draft of Exile, and it can be downloaded at the bottom of this page.

In this chapter we discover the true identity of Fayt Nightfang, where he came from, why he hates the Four Kingdoms and the Samirreh, and what he's been plotting for the last five hundred years. I like to call plot twists like this one "pulling an Elantris". It's where an offhand comment made early on in the story, and seemingly completely unimportant becomes the entire reason for the antgonist's actions. In this case Silmera briefly speaks after her story about Marael about where the Samirreh came from and what happened to them five hundred years ago. Banished from teh Four Kingdoms they went on to enslave Fayt Nightfang's people and murder his wife. He's been laying plans and manipulating events ever since that day to bring about the his revenge.

This is where it really starts to look a bit like hte end of Fullmetal Alchemist. Fayt Nightfang used his path of conquest through the Four Kingdoms to spill a magic circle in blood across the entire continent, linking to the one that he forced Silmera to trace in her own blood. It drains the life of every living being in the entire continant and gives it to him. Now, like I've said before, that's like EXACTLY what happens in the end of FMA, and I'm really kinda pissed that I didn't get around to writing it out first, because now it's going to look like I just copied it, which I didn't, you can check dates on my website for when I started this draft, i didn't start without knowing how it would end, that would just be retarded. And then compare it to when that part of FMA aired and see I started way before then so =P.

Anyway, Fayt Nightfang's plan is to become a god, kill everyone that ever wronged him, shatter the Gate and make his own within his own body, and ressurect his beloved wife, but what he didn't count on was how sick Mal is of losing things, and the insane lengths to which he will go in order to save Silmera's life.

And again, if you feel like the storyline between Patrick and Weasel just sort of came out of nowhere, never fear, the next draft will have a whole lot more of them in it so that you will hopefully care what happens to these characters by this time.

This chapter is told in 5 different viewpoints in three locations with a paragraph of omnicient tossed in to describe the events taking place all over the Four Kingdoms. And yet again, this chapter ends with a cliffhanger ramping it up into the final confrontations in the next chapter.

Alrighty, just 3 chapters left to write and I can get back to work on Spires of Infinity BWAAHAAHAA.

The first draft of this story ended at 117,352 words.
The Second draft is currently at 240,421 words, which is a difference of just over 123,000 words. If that doesn't convince anyone that read the first draft and hated it that this is almost a completely different story I don't know what will.