Exile Chapter 16 rewrites

I've finished the second draft of Exile Chapter 16 and it can be downloaded at the bottom of this page.

Almost this entire chapter has been rewritten from scratch to incorporate character personality changes, general storyline changes, and other such things. The only things that remain nchanged are Aaron's descriptions of where he met Anna, and about the Oracle's prophecy. This chapter now gives a much better picture of Silmera's plight, and Aaron's life up to now, and the mutual distrust that there is between them. This did not come out in the first draft but they are rather unwilling allies. Silmera considers Aaron to be a lazy coward that's too stupid to do his responsibilities, and Aaron views Silmera as an abominably evil beast that is the offspring of the one that nearly destroyed the world. Yet they have little choice than to work together.

The first draft of this story ended at 117,352 words.
The second draft is currently at 150,789 words.

That is a 33,437 word difference. To put that in perspective that is the equivilant of 56 single spaced, 12 point font pages. The first draft manuscript was only 186 pages to begin with, so 56 pages is almost a 1/3 addition already, and I'm only about halfway through the second draft, with the majority of edits still ahead of me.