Exile Chapter 12 rewrites

I've finished the second draft of Exile chapter 12 and it can be downloaded at the bottom of this page.

There was a lot added to this chapter, most notably a section where Mal asks Silmera about Heretics. This is important because Mal needs to know the difference between a Heretic and a Samirreh in the very next chapter. Silmera gave a small explanation of the fact that Samirreh are tattooed during her story, but Mal never really learned the difference between the two in the first draft. I've also changed Silmera's plans a bit for telling Mal that she is a Heretic, and in the next chapter a little of how he will find out, because in the first draft I had her planning things that no woman in her right mind would ever in a billion years do. I may not be an expert on women, but I do know THAT. Now it's not going to be planned, it's just going to happen, much more realistic that way.

The first draft of this story ended at 117,352 words.
The second draft is currently at 137,018 words.

That's almost a 20,000 word difference. That is the equivilant of 32 12 point font single spaced pages, or about 5-6 chapters. Man, oh man, did this story suck before I started editing.